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Sing it brutha

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Sam. It's very easy to do the blank narrator bit. Who IS Rachel really? Why is she such a blank? Why is the action occurring through somebody else - and she's just a passive recipient of it?

Not bad but not great either.

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Dude. What's with you and the tude? I thought it was just a really sexy, well-crafted story - a great thing to just be posted on the web. Who made you, David Steiger, the boss of everything?

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Well, I take literature very seriously and believe it should be excellent always. You?

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Yeah, I like literature too but that doesn't mean I go around writing rude comments on Substacks about it.

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